Analysis of Rings in the Mist

Dan S. English 1953 (Texas)



Buy me a cigar, my ever patient friend,
and listen while my heart builds a darkened room
to hold the smoke.
Then we’ll wait ‘til the rolling clouds have settled to the floor
and I can clearly see whose there, or not,
Until the rings we blew into the mist
come round again to show their chang’ed form,
so near to what we once were,
so far from what we’d hoped for.


Scheme ABCDEFGHD
Poetic Form
Metre 11001110101 01011110101 1101 11110101110101 0111011111 0101110101 110111111 1111110 1111111
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 364
Words 72
Sentences 2
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 9
Lines Amount 9
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 8
Letters per stanza (avg) 280
Words per stanza (avg) 72

About this poem

In the 2000, I believe, this poem won the Poetry.com bronze medal, as well as being an Editor’s Choice. I wrote this in 1985 or ‘86, as I mourned the end of my marriage.

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Written on 1985

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Modified on March 05, 2023

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