Analysis of Unseen



Can’t you see that I’m only pretending?
To wake up in the morning with a bright smile on my face
Can’t you see that I’m trying?
To hide and cover these bad memories that made the base
Can’t you see, I’m hoping
To have even a slightly less horrible day
Or just a one where my trouble are kept at bay

Can’t you see, that I’m jealous
Of that one girl who so effortlessly would make everyone’s heart flutter
Can’t you see, I’m desperate
For a glance from that ignorant boy that make me feel valid
Can’t you see, that I’m looking forward
To meet that special someone who likes to care
Showers me with love and my tired soul will bear

Can’t you see, I want to be better
I want to be worth the things I receive
Can’t you see that I have realized
By trial that the picture-perfect life is all to deceive
Can’t you see, the anger, the frustration
The intensity of my isolated breakdown
Trying to carry myself without a frown

Can’t you see, I’m waiting
For someone to understand what all my thoughts are about
Can’t you see, I’m drowning
Trying to hold onto anything until I find my way out
Can’t you see the wiped away tears?
Can’t you hear my silent cries?
Or will you ignore me until the light inside dies?


Scheme ABABACC XDXXXEE DFXFXGG AHAHXII
Poetic Form
Metre 1111110010 11100101011111 1111110 11010111001101 111110 111001011001 110111101111 1111110 1111111000111110 111110 101111001111110 111111010 1111011111 101110110111 111111110 1111101101 11111110 110101001111101 1110100010 00100111001 1011010101 111110 111011111101 111110 101110100111111 11101011 1111101 1110110101011
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,246
Words 237
Sentences 5
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 7, 7, 7, 7
Lines Amount 28
Letters per line (avg) 33
Words per line (avg) 8
Letters per stanza (avg) 233
Words per stanza (avg) 58

About this poem

rough draft of word vomit

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Written on February 24, 2022

Submitted on February 25, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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