Analysis of Sinking Into Your Island



With your hands pressed firm against my hips
I can feel the brittle angles of your fingers
Nails pinching at my skin and leaving behind fog

You don’t like the clouds pouring out of my mouth
Don’t like the way I push mist into your clothes and collarbones
You tell me the thickness makes you sick
Chokes you better than my forearms do

I glide my palms down your sheets
Carving ravines for you to melt into
Clear rivulets of you beading off my ribs

I think you should do something to my eyes
You should reach up for my face and lay
Fingerprints over top my closed eyelids
So I have no choice but to stay cold and latent

Your start to dissolve into my neck until there’s
None of you left, nothing but my limbs and your blankets
The shadow of a round blue face left in my memory

River-water rises around me, stranding me here in your
Utterly overcast bed—you never taught me how to swim
And if I pay close attention while I’m groping the pillow
I can almost pet your hair


Scheme AXX XAXB XBX XXXX AXX XXXX
Poetic Form
Metre 111110111 111010101110 110111010011 11101101111 1101111011101 111010111 111011011 1111111 1001111101 11111111 1111110111 111111101 10101111 111111111010 111010111011 1111101110110 0110111101100 101010011101101 10010111011111 011110101110010 111111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 982
Words 191
Sentences 1
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 3, 4, 3, 4, 3, 4
Lines Amount 21
Letters per line (avg) 37
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 129
Words per stanza (avg) 31

About this poem

Something about how static loneliness is

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Written on December 13, 2022

Submitted by fef on January 27, 2023

Modified on March 05, 2023

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