Analysis of My two sons

Tooeyy 1943 (Pietermaritzburg)



My two sons

A little while ago they were right here,
They'd say, don't fret, you worry so, mother,
I could feel them, hear them, touch,
We lived life, didn't think too much,
They were my sons, good kids, teens,
Normal, ornery, taunting, full of beans,
Trey, my eldest was tall, we called him shorty,
Dexter, the second, smaller but more sporty,
I just want to tell everyone,
How they bathed on the beach in the sun,
They dutifully went to school,
Pushed and shoved, played the fool,
Trustingly obeyed the compulsory mandates,
Girls, they played the field went on dates,
I know its futile, but I wonder where they are,
I feel them nearby watching me bake or so so far,
They surfed for hours in the sea,
Raced down the beach fast and free,
They would run around in the rain,
They didn't care about the lightning and thunder,
They were so full of life nothing could get them under,
Sometimes they would be annoyed,
I didn't care. Now I'm in this void,
Myocarditis, from what does that stem?
How could something like that take both of them?


Scheme X XABBCCDDEEFFGGHHDDXAAIIJJ
Poetic Form
Metre 111 0101011011 1111110110 1111111 11110111 1011111 1010010111 11101111110 10010101110 1111110 111101001 11000111 101101 101001001 11101111 111101110111 1111110111111 11110001 1101101 11101001 110101010010 1011111011110 0111101 110111011 111111 1110111111
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,055
Words 218
Sentences 4
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 1, 25
Lines Amount 26
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 398
Words per stanza (avg) 95

About this poem

A mother has lost her two sons. She wants to tell everybody about them. How she misses them.

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Written on February 11, 2023

Submitted by apricopip on February 11, 2023

Modified on March 14, 2023

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Tooeyy

I am a retired columnist.. I live in capoe Town, South Africa with my wife Carol, more…

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