Analysis of Stones

Landon Moore 2007 (Saint Louis, MO)



Scheduled, but it snuck up on me,

Like a midnight campaign announced by enemy troops.

Horrified, but expected to read steadily,

Like a broken record, the events play out every year in a loop.

Innocents spared, but it costs their innocence,

They think they are playing games, but they drain their humanity.

All gone, but they never notice its absence,

They think death is the worst, but the guilt is the real atrocity.

Stones stacked, like rifles cocked for massacre,

The scopes aimed at one, yet targets the whole community.

Suspense killing the souls of the village, making their hearts blacker,

The scopes aimed by the eyes of tradition mixed with the deepest depths of humanity.

Empty households become emptier,

Mothers are forced to chance the lives of their children.

Boys become men when they have no protector,

Silence drowns the women, children, and men.

Order becomes chaos when it breaks tradition,

Safety is found in death when good men do nothing.

The elders brainwash the youth of the nation,

As they were indoctrinated into that thinking.

Hurried voices amplify as the inquisition begins,

Once one person knows, there is no secret.

Shock mixes with fear and puts goosebumps on skin,

There is no fair when the judge is the culprit.

Families are targeted, children and all,

One is marked for death, the others for mourning.

It is unknown who must answer the call,

But the family will be broken in the morning

A black spot marks a forced divorce.

A paralyzed hand, grip unbreakable.

No one’s words worked, she could not be coerced,

Her husband's force revealed the undeniable.

Pebbles, rocks, boulders.

Not just men, nor just men and women.

Weapons ready like soldiers,

Prepared and even used by children

“It isn’t fair, it isn’t right.”

Her screams ring out with the crunch of her bones,

We could only pray that what she saw was a light.

Tradition is cemented by stones.

Original Piece- “The Lottery,” by Shirley Jackson

Jackson, Shirley. “‘the Lottery,’ by Shirley Jackson.” The New Yorker, 19 June 1948, www.newyorker.com/magazine/1948/06/26/the-lottery.


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Poetic Form
Metre 10111111 101010111001 10101011100 101001001111001001 10011111100 111110111110100 11111010110 1111011011010100 1111011100 01111110010100 0110011010101110 011101101011010110100 10101100 101111011110 10111111010 1010101001 100110111010 101101111110 0101011010 110010001110 1010101001001 1110111110 1101101111 11111011010 10011001001 11111010110 1101111001 1010011100010 01110101 010110100 1111111101 01010100100 10110 111111010 1010110 010101110 111111 0111101101 111011111101 010101011 01001010011010 1010010011010011011100100
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 2,303
Words 476
Sentences 29
Stanzas 42
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 42
Letters per line (avg) 39
Words per line (avg) 8
Letters per stanza (avg) 39
Words per stanza (avg) 8

About this poem

This poem is a poetry adaptation of Shirley Jackson's "The Lottery". I've always thought the short story was very striking and eerie, so I did my best to capture that feeling.

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Written on October 30, 2023

Submitted by landon.moore.pu on December 08, 2023

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Landon Moore

Am a high school student in Honors Lit, hate writing essays but love creative writing. more…

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