Analysis of Coal once forced shines brightest



Caught in a storm of rememicent danger
Order knocked into chaos with vicious laughter
A raw emotion hidden within a shattered chest
Lightning flashes and a tumble for the failed child

Offal flies from a sewage, cracks within the very foundation
Night comes and is but a shadow to reach towards
Caught tight by the brute in the shadows wrath
Echoes within the jagged daggers dripping viscus memories

Fighting for breath my back bows as I kneel
Often asking of the light for penance of heart
Rugged is the road traveled through the confined silence
Crushed beneath the weight of pure emptiness
Entering risks tumble through the air forcing to dodge
Dark shadows lurk always at the edge of that silence

Struggles within the tumult of the storms lashing winds
Holding strong against the force winds
Iron runs over the hot coals and hardens as it runs to ice
"No," he shouts towards the violence of the storm
Every fiber wanted more but forced to bear his strength
Since his time began the storms wrath flared in straps flying

Baying to the heavens he found a strength
Robbed of warmth though it is lined with ice
Into scars forming a thin wall each stitched with threads
Gone are the threads to the past yet valued threads stay
Holding strong only because there has to be some light
Each shadow should have a ray or light to hold it at bay
Strong are good memories but sometimes they are edged
Though they hurt sometimes they are the most precious


Scheme AAXX XXXX XXBCXB DDEXFX FEXGXGXC
Poetic Form
Metre 10011110 101011011010 0101010010101 101000101011 111010101010010 11011011101 111010011 10010110101100 1011111111 101010111011 1010110100110 1010111100 1001101011011 11111011110 1001010101101 10101011 1011001101011111 111010100101 10010101111111 1110101110110 1010101101 111111111 011100111111 110110111011 1011001111111 1111011111111 111100101111 11101110110
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,459
Words 274
Sentences 1
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 6, 6, 8
Lines Amount 28
Letters per line (avg) 42
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 236
Words per stanza (avg) 52

About this poem

This is a poem about my inner struggle of a life where everyone only leaves a shadow and the memories of those shadows sometimes bear weight but I have to struggle on because I've done it before.

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Written on April 21, 2024

Submitted by daddymagic on April 21, 2024

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Dale "Coyote" Johnson

I am 48 years old and was born and raised in Minnesota, mostly in foster care and other facilities and passed off because back in the 80's mental illness was boys just being boys and you had to have extremes in order to be correctly diagnosed. more…

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