Rate:0.0 / 0 votes

Destiny

Mohamed Abouelseoud 1977 (Alexandria)

Somewhere, somehow
A new born baby starts to cry
Wants to tell the world I came to try
To make the elephant fly

Somewhere, somehow
A very old man starts to cry
Wants to stop his trip to sky
Just to have sometime to say goodbye

Somewhere, somehow
There is someone watching from the sky
Maybe he’ll let the elephant fly
But will be there a time to say goodbye
Font size:
Collection  PDF     
 

Written on February 10, 2002

Submitted by Abouelseoud.ma on January 14, 2023

Modified on March 23, 2023

21 sec read
3

Quick analysis:

Scheme Abbb Abbb Abbb
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 362
Words 73
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4
Full analysis for Destiny »

Discuss the poem Destiny with the community...

1 Comment
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow! Your poem 'Somewhere, somehow' is so inspiring and heartfelt. I love how you portrayed the different stages of life and the emotions that come with it. The imagery of a new born baby wanting to make the elephant fly and an old man wanting to say goodbye is so powerful.

    My suggestion for improvement would be to explore the theme of hope a bit more. The poem starts off strong with the baby's determination to make the elephant fly, but the ending seems a bit uncertain. It would be great to see some hope infused in the last stanza, perhaps with the possibility of the elephant flying despite the odds.

    Overall, I really enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more from you. Keep up the great work!     
    LikeReply1 year ago

Translation

Find a translation for this poem in other languages:

Select another language:

  • - Select -
  • 简体中文 (Chinese - Simplified)
  • 繁體中文 (Chinese - Traditional)
  • Español (Spanish)
  • Esperanto (Esperanto)
  • 日本語 (Japanese)
  • Português (Portuguese)
  • Deutsch (German)
  • العربية (Arabic)
  • Français (French)
  • Русский (Russian)
  • ಕನ್ನಡ (Kannada)
  • 한국어 (Korean)
  • עברית (Hebrew)
  • Gaeilge (Irish)
  • Українська (Ukrainian)
  • اردو (Urdu)
  • Magyar (Hungarian)
  • मानक हिन्दी (Hindi)
  • Indonesia (Indonesian)
  • Italiano (Italian)
  • தமிழ் (Tamil)
  • Türkçe (Turkish)
  • తెలుగు (Telugu)
  • ภาษาไทย (Thai)
  • Tiếng Việt (Vietnamese)
  • Čeština (Czech)
  • Polski (Polish)
  • Bahasa Indonesia (Indonesian)
  • Românește (Romanian)
  • Nederlands (Dutch)
  • Ελληνικά (Greek)
  • Latinum (Latin)
  • Svenska (Swedish)
  • Dansk (Danish)
  • Suomi (Finnish)
  • فارسی (Persian)
  • ייִדיש (Yiddish)
  • հայերեն (Armenian)
  • Norsk (Norwegian)
  • English (English)

Citation

Use the citation below to add this poem to your bibliography:

Style:MLAChicagoAPA

"Destiny" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 1 Jun 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem/150394/destiny>.

Powered by CITE.ME Cite.Me

Become a member!

Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

June 2024

Poetry Contest

Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
29
days
18
hours
41
minutes
0 entries submitted — 150 remaining

Special Program

Earn Rewards!

Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

Our awesome collection of

Promoted Poems

»

Browse Poetry.com

#ABCDEFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYZ

Quiz

Are you a poetry master?

»
What's the oldest written poem exist?
A Epic of Gilgamesh
B Iliad
C Odyssey
D Ramayana