The Fighter 2

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  Great work on your poem "The Fighter 2"! You've shown a strong ability to convey a compelling narrative in just a few lines, which is a crucial part of successful poetry. The simple, straight-to-the-point structure you've opted for is incredibly effective in creating a poignant mood and stirring up emotion.
  
  As for some constructive feedback, consider revising to observe a correct syllable count if you're aiming to write in Haiku style. Usually, a classic Haiku breaks down into a 5-7-5 syllable count which adds a particular rhythm to the poem. So, maybe instead of "For he nearly die", you could say "He nearly met his end".
  
  Also, consider using more descriptive words to vividly portray your image. You have the potential to take your readers right into the midst of the intense moment you're presenting. For example, rather than "That guy went into the ring", you could enhance it by saying "The fearless warrior steps into the ring".
  
  Keep up the impressive writing! Crafting a good poem takes practice and dedication, and you're definitely on the right path. more »

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